Mae
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Post by Mae on Oct 27, 2020 23:08:33 GMT
Sure
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Post by ricochet6-Mandrake on Nov 3, 2020 5:09:04 GMT
Would like to make some changes to make this move a non combat passive.
[RAM UPGRADE] Precognitive Vision: On very rare occasions he can see a brief glimpse of the future. The glimpse of the future is of an event a few minutes to a few hours away. Though it can happen while he is awake, it happens more often in his sleep. The visions never occur during battle though. (Non combat passive)
And make this move the new Ram Upgrade instead.
[RAM UPGRADE] Divine Transformation: Allows Mandrake the ability to transform into various Human World animals. The animals can be bigger or smaller than average. As an animal he can attack with various parts of his body. While using this ability he can still communicate telepathically but has no access to his other powers. If he gets hit by an attack or uses another ability he returns to his normal form. Lasts two posts.
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Mae
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Post by Mae on Nov 19, 2020 21:50:13 GMT
Just one thing here. Make sure this ability fades off if Mandrake either uses a different ability/attack or gets hit by something. ...Also give it a duration in combat. I'd say one or two posts works fine.
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Post by ricochet6-Mandrake on Nov 19, 2020 22:09:06 GMT
Okay gave Divine Transformation a duration and made the other change you asked for.
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Mae
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Post by Mae on Nov 24, 2020 16:54:16 GMT
1/2.
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Post by Amelie on Dec 7, 2020 5:09:46 GMT
Approved.
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Post by ricochet6-Mandrake on Jan 23, 2021 0:09:34 GMT
Since LJ is becoming his own mon I want to add info for the second kid to be Mandrake's second mercenary instead. Digimon Name: Kshin Default Form: Rookie Gender: Male Alignment: Chaotic Good Skills/Talents: Karate-Taught to him by LJ. Slight of hand. Inventory:Winter clothes Playing cards First Aid Kit Thermal Blanket Magic Kit Appearance(Holosuit): Kshin takes on the form of a ten year old Asian human child with black hair and dark eyes. The black hair comes down to his ears and seems to poof out a bit in the back especially near the ears. He wears blue jeans, dark sneakers, and a white tee-shirt with a blue collar. Over his shirt Kshin wears a red long sleeved shirt. He seems to take on a boy who is a bit shorter than average as well. FaceClaim: DEFENDERS OF THE EARTH • Kshin • Kshin [played by ricochet] Personality: (150 words) In his in training form of Dorimon, Kshin is playful and somewhat mischievious but when he met Mandrake and Lothar he started trying his best to make them proud of him. In his rookie form of Gumdramon he is confident and maybe at times overly so which can lead him sometimes into trouble. Despite that Kshin wants to try his best to solve problems on his own but will accept help when he needs it. He is intelligent and eager to learn new things and is amazed by Mandrake's magical abilities. Despite being adopted by Mandrake and Lothar he sometimes fears he will be abandoned by those that care about him. He is also a kind hearted youngster with a strong sense of justice wanting to be just like Mandrake and Lothar. He still is a little bit mischievous as Gumdramon but tries to never take it to far because deep down he fears being abandoned. When trying to learn new things he works hard to master it. He loves adventure and wants to be strong so he can protect those he cares about. Personal History: (200 words) At the start of his life it seemed Kshin would be destined as the child of an adventurer since his Arresterdramon father and Dorugamon mother traveled with him searching for a long lost treasure with his DoruGreymon grandfather. Unfortunately this family trip was doomed to not end well when pirates attacked the family. In an effort to protect Kshin, who was a fresh stage Dodomon at the time, his parents were killed by the pirates. Possibly his grandfather was lost as well because Kshin couldn't find him either. The head of the pirates however found young Kshin but mercifully did the boy no physically harm taking him to a coastal town in the Digital World. It seemed fortunate that she didn't raise the young orphan but he was looked after by a gang of older children most being newly evolved rookies. When he had recently evolved into his in training form of Dorimon it seemed things improved for him when he and the gang of youngsters he was with attempted to rob a Wizardmon named Mandrake and a Leomon named Lothar. When it seemed their robbery plan was going upside down and Mandrake and Lothar caught an amused Kshin, the other kids made a break for it. Mandrake and Lothar soon learned of Kshin's orphaned status and feeling bad for the boy they decided to adopt him as their own which made Kshin happy he would have not only parents who cared for him but a big brother named LJ as well. DIGIMON'S INITIAL EVOLUTION LINE FreshSpecies: Dodomon Appearance: Attribute: Free Family/ies: Nature Spirit Type: Slime Fighting Style: Shoots iron beads from a distance and then runs for cover. Abilities: [1 Ability Max] Metal Drop: Spits iron beads that explode releasing a smokescreen so he can cover his escape. Digivolves To: Dorimon In-TrainingSpecies: Dorimon Appearance: Attribute: Free Family/ies: Nature Spirits Type: Lesser Fighting Style: Spits attacks from a distance and runs. Abilities: [2 Abilities Max] Metal Drop: Spits iron beads that explode releasing a smokescreen so he can cover his escape. Frothy Spit: Spits a stream of acidic foam into his opponent's eyes and runs. Digivolves From: Dodomon Digivolves To: Gumdramon RookieSpecies: Gumdramon Appearance: Attribute: Vaccine Family/ies: Nature Spirits Type: Mini Dragon Fighting Style: Executes most his attacks while swinging his tail. Abilities: [4 Abilities Max] Ran-gum Break: Swings his hammer like tail at foes. Jacked Hammer: Executes a foreward handspring while his tail hammer enlarges before he attempts to smash his opponents Fire Vortex: Summersaults at high speeds to generate fire around his body before he swings at foes with a flaming tail. Ran-gum Jetscrew: Spins his tail like a propeller like fashion to generate a powerful cutting wind. While underwater he can spin his tail to propel himself while not creating wind. Digivolves From: Gumdramon Digivolves To: Arresterdramon
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Post by Deleted on Jan 23, 2021 19:58:48 GMT
Kshin's Personality is only 125 words. That's 25 words shy of the required 150 word count.
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Post by ricochet6-Mandrake on Jan 23, 2021 21:24:27 GMT
That should have fixed it. I still sometimes struggle with the number of words needed.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 23, 2021 22:31:38 GMT
1/2
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Mae
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Post by Mae on Jan 24, 2021 21:24:01 GMT
2/2
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Post by ricochet6-Mandrake on Apr 10, 2021 23:40:05 GMT
I would like to add a couple of items to Kshin's inventory please.
Microchip- A chip that contains not only a map to ruins of an ancient city but also a holographic message left by Kshin's grandfather.
Gold Heart Shaped Locket- A locket left to him by his mother that contains a picture of him with his mother, father, and grandfather. In this picture he is in his fresh form of Dodomon and being held by his Dorugamon mother.
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Post by Carlos Rey on Apr 18, 2021 21:53:47 GMT
1/1 done.
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Post by ricochet6-Mandrake on May 16, 2021 3:41:56 GMT
Please add a DNA Super Mega for Mandrake and Hanako so he can DNA with Data and Rush's DNA mega ShadowDurandamon. DNA Super MegaSpecies: Gallantmon Chaos Mode Appearance: Attribute: Virus Family/ies: Virus Busters, Metal Empire, Wind Guardians, Dragon's Roar Type: Warrior Fighting Style: He channels magic through his weapons to perform various magical techniques. Abilities: [11 Abilities Max] Magical Game: Creates illusions with no offensive presence. The illusion lasts two posts unless hit. 2 post CD. Aura Lance: A pale blue aura comes from his lance before he shoots the energy at his opponent. 3 post CD. Rage of the Wyvern: Launches a magical energy burst that takes the shape of a wyvern from his lance. Purifying Light: Heals wounds to himself or another. 2 post CD. Clouded Darkness: Renders himself invisible for two posts. If he attacks, or is hit while invisible, he reappears. 2 post CD. Quo Vadis: Gallantmon Chaos Mode throws his lance into the sky, causing a pillar of burning light to rain down from the sky upon a single foe. 4 post CD. Gungnir: Gallantmon Chaos Mode throws his lance at the foe with all of the speed and power of a railgun, piercing their defenses. Full Piercing, 5 post CD. Binding Flames: Gallantmon Chaos Mode charges his sword in flames, then swings it to launch the flames at the opponent. The flames form a fiery cage around the foe, trapping them in place for 1 posts. 3 post CD. Excalibur: Gallantmon CM grips the Blutgang sword in both hands, and causes the blade to grow to the size of a skyscraper. Gallantmon then brings the massive sword down upon a single target. Once Per Thread. Mystic Might (passive): Gallantmon CM's basic attacks do as much damage as 0-CD named attacks. Mystic Armor (Passive): Raises defense by 30%. Digivolves From: ShadowDurandamon + MedievalDukemon
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Post by Deleted on Jun 6, 2021 23:37:59 GMT
Fun fact: I had no idea DNA's had more moveslots than a normal Digimon before today. And I'm supposed to know this stuff.
Anyway, here's your grading stuff.
- Binding Flames - Reduce the duration to 1 post.
...and that's it.
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